Most of us wake up every morning to the sound of a beeping alarm, and we realize that we have to get up and go to school again. We get to school, and we moan and grumble about how boring our classes are, how we just want to go home and sleep, and how we wish we had no homework. We see education as something that is forced on us and that while it is useful, it is tedious and requires too much effort. But it has always been something readily available to us; there are so many sources that we have access to from which we can gain knowledge, like libraries and the internet. Because of this, we never really learned the value of our education.
But then we hear about the lives of people around the world, people like the girls in
The only reason I can see for this is that they are afraid of what women getting an education would mean and the changes that would arise. They are afraid that they would no longer be able to exert control over the people, since there are more people that are educated and not clueless, and educated people are much harder to control than the clueless that will just accept whatever they say. But they are also afraid of change and of progress. Women receiving an education creates a huge change in their society, and they fear this change.
This fear of new or different things is something that has caused many conflicts through history, like the treatment of Jews in Nazi Germany. The reason Hitler was able to gain support on the idea that Jewish people were not human was because the rest of the people in
So, I ask you to think about the role education plays in your life. You can still grumble about going to school but don’t take it for granted. Education frees us from our ignorance; it allows us to understand others and helps destroy prejudices, reducing the fear we all have of the strange and the different. It basic right that we are all entitled to. If everyone was able to get an education, everyone would be able think for themselves and to choose their own actions. They would not follow the media as blindly as we have done in the past. As someone who is able to receive an education, it is our job to make sure that everyone else has the same choice. Today, little is being done for these girls in
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The first thing that struck me when I read this was the cadence (rhythm/whatever) of the writing style. It starts up nicely in the first paragraph, winding the reader up, before cruising along in the second paragraph and almost taking little breaths. (re-read the second paragraph as if you were saying it, and it sounds like that.)
ReplyDeleteThe pieces of evidence are very well-connected, flowing smoothly during transitions from one paragraph to the next.
The ending works well by providing the reader with a little food for thought for them to munch on as they go to do other stuff besides reading an essay.
Overall, very nice.
Your Op-Ed is very well thought-out and very detailed in how it treats the subject of repression in society. As Kevin said, it is well connected and flows very well.
ReplyDeleteYour writing style made this op-ed very flowy and interesting.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite part was the intro paragraph which was very striking and very well written. I completley agree with you and the fact that the Taliban militiants are afraid of change and giving women an education. Women recieving an education means destruction of tradition and the "old order."
This is a very good piece. Your evidence is stated clearly and it flows very well (even though I'm not sure if it went in the direction you were planning it to).
ReplyDeleteI agree totally with your assesment that the Taliban are afraid of the change that would surely come if women were educated, and this is the reason why women in Pakistan are not being allowed their education: male Taliban leaders are afraid that women with individual minds will upset their power. I also really liked how you incorperated the media's role into this.
And, finally, in answer to your question...
I'm ready. Where do we begin?
-Sarah
Great job. The intro paragraph sums up Western thought towards schooling, which are immediately followed by the facts that not all school children get to complain about school.
ReplyDeleteYour thoughts on the Taliban's reasons for not allowing girls to attend school are very possible, and their fundamentalist Muslim approach shows that they do wish to return to past ideals, which do not include girl sin school.
Overall, great piece.